Sunday, September 27, 2009

This I believe First Draft

Human kind has created many things, crafted many arts, and has engineered incredible structures. The human is an extraordinary species with many attributes separating them from the rest of the animal kingdom. But what really makes the human race special? I believe emotion is the most beautiful aspect of a human being.

There are lots of different emotions, and each one can have a big impact on me if I'm presented with a situation I've never been in before. They certainly get the best of me sometimes, but it's a beautiful learning process despite some of the let downs. It's what makes humans, human, and it's what makes me human.

One of the things that brings out my emotion is music. Whenevr I'm bummed out, listening to my favorite music never fails. It's a cure for sadness, and it's also my good friend when I'm happy. I had just recently gone to a U2 concert with my father and sister, and many of the songs I felt like everyone was in unison. Thousands of people at once shared the same emotion with people they didn't even know. It was a really powertful, special feeeling. It made me feel incredibly happy.

So as far as being successful goes, as long as I'm truly happy, I'm successful. I know I don't need a huge house, I don't need spinners for my Cadillac, or a Cadillac at all. I don't need to know I have millions of dollars in the bank. And I don't even really care if the Yankees won the World Series, although it would be nice. The most beautiful thing to me is emotion. And as long as I can feel them, and be able to share my happiness with someone special, I'll be successful.




Post Write
I believe it's an ok piece of writing. But it was really rushed, and not much was covered. It was long enough, and I didn't present a moment when my belief was challenged. And it kind of seems like I went off into a completely different subject about being happy and successful. I need to make a major change in the story line.

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